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Old 12-12-2013, 02:08 AM   #13
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Certain verse 1

I did not see the episode. Was it a rip off of a sitcom episode ?or was it just another episode in Certain verse #1's production of simple stories with fairytale kid endings. This verse ran in line with Certain verse # 1's story about ketchup on jeans. Apocalyptic destruction, nuclear bomb, glasses are crushed - more heavy hard hitting wordplay to make glasses crushed sound devastating. Certain verse #1 was decent.

Certain verse 2

Verse read like a blurr to me now as I try to recall it. That could be your intentions here, I never quite get a minute of focus here until Allauh Akbar enters the cabin, at which point, the plane is going down. Certain verse #2 was written like it was written on a tray table with a crayon during a violent turbulence, Well done.


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