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hm.

Mike Wrecka lifted/ redid the story from that one twilight zone episode.. I was just talking to someone about it actually lol. The theme was pretty straightforward, don't let your passion become you... or, be careful what you wish for. Either way, the focus was on how the man became so ensconced in his fantasies that he separated himself from the world. And when the world is gone, through the act of smashing his glasses, he discovers that he truly has nothing

Of course, beneath the surface this is also implying that the man had nothing before the world-ending disaster as well.

aside from this visceral moment of clarity, there was not much development or characterization or personal spin added to the framework of the story that was provided to you. You can obv drop some serious story pieces (it seems to be your focus and advantage in these marches) so it would have been nice to see you embellish the themes a bit.

The rhyming was smooth and subtle. very nice. you didn't make it overstated or more complex than it needed to be, easy reading.




Diode wrote about a modern-day suicide-bomber jihadist. I think that the take was pretty unique and interesting to begin with. Not what i was expecting from Rd 1 playoffs

I did not like the italicized section. It seemed to me to be a sloppy description of either hell, the man's birthplace, or the suicide bombing journey..
.. maybe it is noting that their ultimate fate is not so different from what they would experience in their home country.

i think you did a good job describing the actions in a blow-by-blow manner.

finally, the ending was by far the best part.

it ties in the death of family members mentioned before, and the descriptions of the emotions and anticipations of the jihadists from before their final mission.

The idea that Death brings no clarity to its victims is contrary to the sugar-coated idealism that many Westerners hold dear... and perhaps can be seen as one of the greater divides between the fracturing Christian religions and the rock-solid, more traditional Islam.

And it is true that your main character had already seen his clarity. His unquestioning dedication is a reflection of the hard roads he and his people walked. While you do not make any effort to make your character relatable or even a protagonist, the death and destruction he delivered fulfilled their purpose in spreading this solemnity to those he felt lived without it. And through this, brought an appreciation of life- rather an understanding of death- to people unaffected by its pull


In the end, despite bad (bad) wording, flow, and rhymes, Diode articulated quite an advanced set of themes and ideas. Though i do prefer Zygote's rendition on religious extremists.


I'm surprised by this.... because after my initial read-throughs it appeared that MW had won with a no-show verse... but despite quite unsuperior mechanics and delivery, i believe Diode took this battle in its entirety. Mike Wrecka's verse seemed very uninspired by comparison.

good read.

V/ Diode