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King Ra. · 12-09-2013, 10:40 PM

Hmm, this was a shocker for me.

Lotto Smirk, I didn't like the way you came off on your first two bars. The opener was very bland to me & didn't hit at all. The follow-up bar, which seems to be a personal attempt in relation to Joe Metts/Mets/Citi field, came off awkward to me. I read it a few times but I don't know. Your last 3 bars, imo were pretty good. They gave a phuck/adoption paper punch was cool, mainly because your set up did it's job in leading to that punch connection. You follow up the next bar probably a tad better, with a personal shot that came off pretty well. And I liked the closer, it was okay, but the two bars before it did very well. Phuck Yew, I see you key'd this up in 15 minutes.... from other verses I read from you, this fell short & reads like a key indeed. Your opening punch was pretty dope. Didn't like the set up too much, but the play on the name with the punch was good. I felt after that line, things got a bit eh. The second bar was another play on his name, but it didn't really hit hard. A bit generic. The third bar I felt could have been killer, but the wording seemed funky. And the set up, as has been the case through your verse thus far, didn't really boost it. But again, the wording wasn't working for me with the concept you used. Your 4th bar & closer were guilty of coming of a bit bland, more particularly, your closer with the lot bitch shit/more than/parking spots for women. That is a bit obscene and doesn't really make sense. The 4th bar, I didn't like the "drunk driving on railroads" connection with L-Train. I understand the idea like the Duck Dynasty, but whereas the Duck Dynasty was a worded issue, the 4th bar just didn't tie together well. The set ups here weren't all that great which also hurt you a bit, but then again, this was a key. So I understand it's not perfect.

Believe it or not, I have Lotto stealing a bit of an upset here over one of the more consistent battlers. Maybe if Phuck had actually put a bit more time in his verse it would have won easily, but instead Lotto really did a nice job outside of his first to bars to take this one.

MVGT: Lotto Smirk.

12-09-2013, 10:40 PM	#9
King Ra. The Throne, The Crown Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,667 Battle Record: 21-35 Rep Power: 1932963	Hmm, this was a shocker for me. Lotto Smirk, I didn't like the way you came off on your first two bars. The opener was very bland to me & didn't hit at all. The follow-up bar, which seems to be a personal attempt in relation to Joe Metts/Mets/Citi field, came off awkward to me. I read it a few times but I don't know. Your last 3 bars, imo were pretty good. They gave a phuck/adoption paper punch was cool, mainly because your set up did it's job in leading to that punch connection. You follow up the next bar probably a tad better, with a personal shot that came off pretty well. And I liked the closer, it was okay, but the two bars before it did very well. Phuck Yew, I see you key'd this up in 15 minutes.... from other verses I read from you, this fell short & reads like a key indeed. Your opening punch was pretty dope. Didn't like the set up too much, but the play on the name with the punch was good. I felt after that line, things got a bit eh. The second bar was another play on his name, but it didn't really hit hard. A bit generic. The third bar I felt could have been killer, but the wording seemed funky. And the set up, as has been the case through your verse thus far, didn't really boost it. But again, the wording wasn't working for me with the concept you used. Your 4th bar & closer were guilty of coming of a bit bland, more particularly, your closer with the lot bitch shit/more than/parking spots for women. That is a bit obscene and doesn't really make sense. The 4th bar, I didn't like the "drunk driving on railroads" connection with L-Train. I understand the idea like the Duck Dynasty, but whereas the Duck Dynasty was a worded issue, the 4th bar just didn't tie together well. The set ups here weren't all that great which also hurt you a bit, but then again, this was a key. So I understand it's not perfect. Believe it or not, I have Lotto stealing a bit of an upset here over one of the more consistent battlers. Maybe if Phuck had actually put a bit more time in his verse it would have won easily, but instead Lotto really did a nice job outside of his first to bars to take this one. MVGT: Lotto Smirk. __________________ Vetwork, bitches.