Not sure why Apex only went 8 in a 10 bar battle. That immediately puts him at a disadvantage. None of his lines really did any justice. The wording was off in almost every line and it really took any sting away that the punches could have had. The ideas weren't bad, but the execution was lacking.
Plot, your execution was better, but still lacking. In order to get the punches home, you need to have effective wording. We spoke about this before and the wording is still a bit off. I still think that screwdriver line was the best line I've seen from you thus far, but this verse just seemed a bit rushed to me. However, it was enough to win.
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