There's some cool wordplay embedded within. It came off as an abstract piece that was somewhat stream of conscious in the vein of Aesop Rock. If there was to be some coherency to the piece as a whole, it was a little too heady for me to pick up on one read.
I particularly enjoyed this:
"Take for instance this line: "Be a workhorse or get trampled. Stay stable."
If it behooves you, pick a gal up and make her breast jangle"
Keep doing.
Cimm
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