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Old 12-07-2013, 06:57 PM   #2
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Nice use of alliteration and word usage in this. It was poetic, but I still feel like it could be rapped. That's rare. Although this is short I can see you have talent. I hope to read more of your work soon.

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A continent of consonants, my legion of demons
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Feed on my piece Loser would be appreciated. Stay active man.
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