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Zen · 12-07-2013, 03:19 PM

Sorry I'm late on returning feed to you man, but here it is.

Judging by the title I'm assuming that in the first two sections you're Loki watching the chaos you created kinda like setting up the scene. The opening line is what made me think that since you're watching your demons at play. The last few sections seem to be specific situations that you're watching with one guy cheating on his gf online and another fucking someone on a playground lol. I could be wrong, but that's what I got out of it. Mechanics wise, this was nice again. Keep developing this style. It's unique.

12-07-2013, 03:19 PM	#3
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Sorry I'm late on returning feed to you man, but here it is. Judging by the title I'm assuming that in the first two sections you're Loki watching the chaos you created kinda like setting up the scene. The opening line is what made me think that since you're watching your demons at play. The last few sections seem to be specific situations that you're watching with one guy cheating on his gf online and another fucking someone on a playground lol. I could be wrong, but that's what I got out of it. Mechanics wise, this was nice again. Keep developing this style. It's unique. Last edited by Zen; 12-07-2013 at 03:23 PM.