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Old 12-07-2013, 01:42 PM   #2
Vulgar
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Incomplete English when it comes to rhyming hurts you a lot of the time, Veritas. Eloquence is on the forecast but you're not consistently raining on them hoes yet, so to speak. lol. A few degrees north and I'm confident you'll be there. For example, 'caustic' and 'blame honest' are mismatches.

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Mind blown: How to remain pure when these are those who govern how u manage?
^Scary thoughts though, eh?

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I think if you wrote in a philosophic way vs. a firm believer lecturing it would be more effective - meaning, as the writer, remain neutral, but through your elaborative statements, completely drive your point home. I find myself reading your work and hearing a stern, determined, directive narrator's voice, and this doesn't cut it entirely for me. @The Mind Assassin

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