I didn't mind that you joined as an alias and attempted something original. Have as much fun with being an "avatar" on the internet, if you will. Expand on your inner self to the fullest and share it with others in anonymity on the web sphere, in peace. You are going in the right direction, in my opinion.
this conviction thrills the psych wards ragamuffin'.
^Lol. I thought this was humorous for some reason. Mostly because I haven't heard or read the word 'ragamuffin' in 5+ years.
Your topical writing ranges from average to provocative. I think that this can be attributed to you not reading enough books. One of the root causes of this is, for example, that you repeat words and take obvious routes when writing. I'm going to bold what I'm indicating:
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The essence of a madman is when you feel the mind's presence.
They use my psych journal's as essays and psychology lessons.
Shouldn't step to me - When I walk I leave a path of mental impressions,
and open new doors in psych after therapy sessions.
Don't look at me; I'm the medusa of mental health & I owe no apology,
talking shrinks to suicide is my version of reverse psychology.
Just read my eulogy; I have no cause, I leave that for the therapy
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You can easily eliminate predictable fodder and offer something really gritty and full of pulp. Have you heard Movies for the Blind by Cage? It's a CD I think you would like, and it might help you in refining your own style. You won't necessarily be copying his persona or techniques, but studying them to better your own. You've got a lot of potential as everyone in the ISTL took note of as well as folks on NC's. If I could give you a tip, it'd be to read more material that enables you to expand your mind, and the mind of the reader - and also, be mindful of how many times you repeat the same notions in your verses, because it scorches the mechanics and makes it tired right out of the gates. Hope this helps. @
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Keep doing you