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Old 12-07-2013, 12:57 PM   #9
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i read the first part of this, i thought it was liive, iunno if i mentioned that or not...but anyways...

this one i didnt like so much, the other one i fucked with cause it seem like you was just writing it straight out the heart/mind with no consideration for a reader/listener wdeva...& it come off authentic, this one just seemed not so raw - raw in the sense of it just being a straight captivation of an expression/emotion uncut & unfiltered...this shit just seemed like it catered to an audience a lil too much if you know what im sayin...thats just the feel i got it this at this particular moment n shit though so take it howeva...i wasnt mad at it it was aiight

on a final note n shit though...shit
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hoping that our friendship explodes
Corodes, and the shrapnel tears her fucking stomache in half
Dumping the trash, killing a fetus that I never wanted to have
considering you already father a yout...shiit gotdamn that some cold ass shit, thats life nigga

im jusstt sayyyin

like i said anyway, this was aiight, part one i fuxd with alot more

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edit - wuuuut thuuuuh fuuuuck at the nigga re-writing parts of the verse lmfaoo whatisthis

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