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Old 12-07-2013, 12:42 PM   #2
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So your girl in real life presumes you are flirting with other individuals on the world wide web while you're just on Netcees repelling trolls and writing verses? lol. One of my interpretations. I thought this was a straight verse. The 'voice' of your verses seems to be predominantly emotional in its tone, at least when its doing its narration thing. God, angels, demons or the devil usually pop up, which is cool. You may be a religious person, or you are interested in theology in general.

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Sins swell, they swarm, they relinquish all ground work.
Wearing karma's omens as trinkets, til me in hell is like sinking a flounder.
Belittled til now, the little they've scrounged against my will's a few pounds dirt...
Enough to cover a casket to the surface level of brown earth.
Nice wording. I especially liked the first line.

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