ThisIsDam
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Her struggle with chemo was something so evil, kept punching her ego
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^insanity
the throat cancer angle could've been touched on more for stronger emotional affect. solid verse though. it dragged the way you wanted it to. nice slow drag.
diode. this was more or less a well written verse - a polarization what have you.
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sweat pouring amounts incalculable -
she glares at me with baited breath for the next move in my tome -
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First line was noticeably forced in a way that deviated from your first 3 lines. The verse started on a such a high note but it would taper off after the first 3 lines for me. 2nd line, couldn't tell if you meant tomb or what. Overall, a good effort not enough to knock down the big bodied verse
vote - this is dam