This was a cool read guys.
Breathless- I liked the take on the dark side of thanksgiving/the betrayal of the natives. I think some word usage was misplaced, but the story itself had a soul to it. I feel it could have been stronger emotionally for that extra enthralling factor because out of that it felt a little flat in terms of expression. Overall, cool piece.
Buddha- I felt the emotion in this piece. I felt the anger, pain, loathing and everything else that came along with your story. I think it was very risky to do this outside of OM, but I appreciated the raw feeling. The flow was still very you and very fluid. Overall, not the piece i expected to read, it loosely related to the subject, but to me it was a strong piece.
MVGT Buddha for the emotional and well flowed display. Tired of revoting smh...
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