Although I disagree with Diodes rant on how a verse should structured
and his misuse of two terms in the ART of WRITING
I do believe that your risk taking may have arrived too late in the league Certain
I can see why you would like this to come across more idk the word
I feel you handled your verse quite well. you seem to lollygag as I have knowing a majority of people aren'tquite ready
but that separates us from the smaller fish who stick to shalloe waters
the depth alone is hard to comprehend if you arent adapting to the progress
some may say your piece is a step back I see it as a evolutionary leap of faith in a different direction
I feel as though peoplr have forgotten what is the ordinary and have bound themselves to what's safe
bravo for taking a different step
although this does lack that Certain touch that I like
thus I must give to NYC for seeming further intact and playing it safe
as most have come to do
v/NYC
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