[patrown]

dam - you took me on a ride here. care for a character. imagery with the canvas, just a great breakthrough into the characters daily activities from a far back perspective. i particularly enjoyed your approach here. but i do feel like you spent too much time on introspective descript/ions. too little development with the second character. but you took it somewhere satisfactory in the end. felt undeveloped though, honestly.

diode - yo you really actually started off strong but in your transition lays the soft-ness
the air became silent, hair bristling, breath quiet
no turning back from this attack, no defending.. unrelenting, intent violent
the tension thick, palpable.. accusations, all factual
we locked looks, hands shook, sweat pouring amounts incalculable
nobody blinked. nobody spoke. nobody broke. at the brink.
i'd held it inside this deep mind, this deep sigh, this deep.. why?
a simple question, and yet, no answer still

/v dam