ok quick vote guys
Certain- I wasn't really a fan of what you did this week. I think you figured you had your position locked up and said let me try something different. the writing was very good. in the aspect that it was still Certainesque, very vivid imagery that created a mood. the mechanics and format was what killed it for me. I was trying to find rhymes. it just didn't rhyme enough for my liking. or really flow for that matter. felt like I was reading a regular short story in some parts. it was dope in that regard but its not what I look for in a topical text verse. was a little veritas style. the story itself hit the topic very well. I will give much credit there. and it was interesting so overall not a total flop, actually an enjoyable read just didn't flow enough
NYC - really liked the flow here. the vocab was strong and interesting. good cadence and the story was intriguing. this verse pulled me in. I like the word combinations you use. good stuff. when you write like this you are hard to beat my friend. sorry for the quickie but ya
vote - nyc
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