certain - at first, i was thrown off. but i really enjoyed this. one of those i gave a quiet chuckle/nod to. crazy deep, yet simple. great piece, was very much enjoyed. "taste the peat," might not sound attractive to the average reader. but that was pretty good. little things about this one got me. made me wonder what brand of scotch in particular was "peaty" also, that resonated with some other parts,like, "The den still reeked of smoke." little stylistic inclusions like those give a piece authenticity. good showcase of an abstract bravado, here. the garden stanza felt like prose a little. . . wanted a little more rhyme in the middle of it. you were almost convincing me i was already familiar with some of your sensory observations. great writing.
nycspitz - i'm not really sure why i'm as blown away as i am. i mean, i've read you. i read/have read/will read great people. but this piece is particularly great. it has swag, if that term is appropriate for a product of intelligent human life. you just threw out, "Lizard Nebula," and "fascist galactic senate's regime," as if I had an auntie from the former and an uncle in the latter. although many times that doesn't work for a lot of people, it worked in your favor here.
/v nycspitz - when i'm really stuck between a couple pieces, i'll usually spit'em on a bit that works for both and go with which one i enjoyed delivering more. in this case, i couldn't really "deliver" certains at all. because in my opinion, it was an extremely entertaining and creative venture in creative writing. that nearly won against a traditional topical piece. anyway, great battle.
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