Adonis - Neat piece, but there were some detractions, like the juxtaposed tone of knocking bootsz and using the word betwixt, and using smoke twice in a row. Mostly I was yearning for more detail in what you meant, I couldn't figure if the dragon stuff was fully metaphorical, or meant to be literal
PAt - this is the pat work I remember, I could actually hear this all the way through. The use of names was nice in that it wasn't overdone, but enough to differentiate. I got a strong feeling of social anxiety portrayal in a rather mundane scenario, and it was spot on.
Killed it with these
patiently waiting for a white knight to placate her needs her twighlight sihoulette playing pictionary
outlining the worlds flaws in her silent script that varied
Vote - Pat
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