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Old 12-02-2013, 07:11 PM   #6
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Certain - I think the paragraph style really took away from what this could've been, it read much too my h like a regular short story book excerpt for my tastes. In that aspect it wasn't all to bad, but it still had a general "listing of events" feel rather than a conducive story. The whole gardening section was a chore to read, a decent set up for the land being sentimental, but it went on too long

NYC - this had an awesome vibe to it, almost like Dune meets Ender's game. A lot of times the full blown historical fiction naming gets boring, but this was pulled off really well.

Thesze lines really stuck out as superbly rap like

The Dragon Tears gang came with the senate, with cyborg cops and death of people's canons and prayers Galactic Nero playin' fickle fiddle - Magnus beware A soft chant from the twin brother...years of practice is there Burned its roots, earth, rites and even blackened its air Labelled telepathy as something like cerebral savage despair.

A piece like this makes me want to read an entire novel like this

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