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Old 12-02-2013, 05:12 PM   #8
ThisisDAM
Significance over Purpose
 
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Breathless, this was okay. It def picked up towards the 3rd part. I felt some of the parts ended weird, kinda threw me off the space between them a lil. Basic approach to the topic, it wasn't bad tho. I enjoyed it. Buddha, I'll be honest. As far as verses go, this was very good. If this was just based on that, like a keystyle you'd win. But, I didn't think this went with the topic well or came across as a topical battle style verse. Think that hurt you here.

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