Certain - Excellent verse. I thought the structure would be an issue but it actually promoted the authenticity of the piece. Every paragraph had a nice quality to it, characterized by seasoned writing about the story of the residents. The last section had solid rhyming and a wrap up statement complementary of the whole thing. A hard verse to beat.
NYCSPITZ - This one forced me to think. For one, it made me think this was one of your best verses I've read! Outstanding writing, great instincts for descriptive writing and sweeping scope in some cases throughout. It was about two brothers born from the same father. One is a powerful king and the other is the leader of a criminal syndicate. Both have different opinions on how the universe should be. One rules with an iron, authoritative fist while the other wants to free the people and breathe sovereign air. It was a cross between the Necromancer series and Hell Raiser, due to its cinematic qualities and dramatic conclusion. The way I saw you hit the topic was that when a political figure with a split personality (two sons/two suns) becomes tyrannical, he is in fact selling out to the people; in this case, people who live on terraformed land. This was my understanding of your approach. I could be off but this is what I'm going with for my interpretation. Impressed by this - I won't be sleeping on you during the play-offs.
I won't be sleeping on either of you during the play-offs. Both hit the topic out of the ball park for sure. I liked your offerings. One had a stronger taste and the palate was more pronounced.
Vote - NYCSPITZ
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