Good showing from both. very engaging battle... I was into breathless' verse from the beginning. I think it captured the picture well and complimented it nicely. My critique is that the opening sequence could've been shortened from the setup to the main action. Overall tho I was really into the overall mythology of your verse and the world you created.
Certain.. great stuff as usual.. I don't like the name BENTON for your character but like breathless, I love the play with the fantasy narrative... yours had some added depth and build up though which is a testament to your skill.. I wasn't overly thrilled with the closer but you melded scheme and storytelling and atmosphere here and out performed your opponent on similar ground
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