patrown -
Obviously not a fleshed out verse this week. There were a couple spots were grammar mistakes tripped me up as well. I will say the the flow was very smooth and your rhyming was good, albeit not as good as you usually have. Still a strength. The approach to the topic was pretty standard. Not a bad verse at all but obviously one that was written with 100% commitment to being as creative as possible.
Mike Wrecka -
Very enjoyable verse. You had a good approach in mind and executed it to a tee. There was enough poignancy in the content that a real empathy was built as the verse continued on. The ending was good for the approach you took. Well done.
Mike executed on the topic well and patrown let me down a little bit by leaving creativity/commitment on the table.
v/ MW
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