[PancakeBrah]

Cool.

NYC -

This was well written. The flow was spot on throughout and the rhymes were unique and never forced aside from 'morose and serene'. The imagery was strong throughout. This read like a quick glance into your character's life, a reflective still life portrait of a verse. Your content was nothing new but you were able to put it in such a way that I enjoyed it.

Mr. J -

I enjoyed some of your insights and your approach to the topic. I thought your technique was a bit simple. At certain points you went on little tangents that, while still relating to your topic, felt a bit out of place with the pace. I liked the ending but I felt this piece was a little unfinished/unrefined. I enjoyed it, though, and it kept my attention all the way through.

Mr. J had the slightly more creative approach to the topic but NYC wrote his in a much more deft and creative way. Good battle.

v/NYC