View Single Post
Old 11-22-2013, 05:11 PM   #8
Objective
( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º)
 
Objective's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 3,868
Battle Record: 17-32



Rep Power: 52474192
Objective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant futureObjective has a brilliant future
Default

My gun blade truncates (now) numb napes of Kurosawa’s seven saints
^ This was dope as fuck!

There’s no finer craft it’s… matadors chasing bulls in a China shop,
Time has stopped as my sinus popped sat at the Old God’s civic dining spot
^ Extremely well crafted imo. The sentence is natural, yet the rhymescheme is as on point as it can get imo. Thoroughly enjoyed this part.

We're playing lazer tag with Indians & robbers in an arena built for civil dialogue
Quetzlcoatl's got a headcold, the Gilgamesh's are dying off
^ This shit is extremely dope as fuck, the opening line is one some; ''Holy fuck, it's far fetched but I love what you're getting at!''. I remember learning about Gilgamesh in school, one of the only stories I found to be extremely dope as fuck and interesting beside of Oedipus and the Oracle in Delphi. The way you used Gilgamesh as a reference point here is above conceptualization and really turning intellect, rhyming/writing and history on to some next level shit. Stuff like this can easily go unnoticed, but not this time around. I even know a little bit about Quetzlcoatl due to Final Fantasy as well, had to google that bit to understand what you were getting on about and wasn't overly surprised by the fact it had to do with the aztecs. This might be my favourite opening line to a paragraph in 2013. Well done, be proud of this shit.

The third paragraph is bananas as a whole. Be proud.

Good afternoon. Iwamatsu spat fire… so I exhale naphtha fumes.
Traded my pen nib’s edge from a Muramasa to a Masamune,

^ PURE DOPENESS!

All in all the entire piece is extremely well crafted and deserves A LOT more quotes than I've already commented on, I'd nominate this for the CotY (Collabo of the Year). It's inspiring as fuck too. I mean, holy fuck guys. It's everything I love in topical writing in one verse. History, mythology, japanese arts & crafts, intellect and far fetched concepts/wordplays. I mean, this shit guys, this shit is..

Let's put it this way; I haven't given anyone on netcees a 10/10 on a piece yet. But this deserves it. Definitely an automatically HoF-Nom from me. PURE fucking dopeness.
__________________
I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave,
So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave.


www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o
Objective is offline   Reply With Quote