This battle reminds of the Genocide, pohfig match up pertaining to styles. Two different styles but unlike that match up, this one had a clear cut winner IMO. Camp bell, your rhyme schemes are always on point & once again it showed here. I felt you started off your story very well. But then the switch at the climax threw me off & to be honest it felt as if you sort of lost thought on how to finish your story. That or you tried to add some bit of a twist but it didn't work out too well. All in all, it was a decent read. Mike Wrecka, your storytelling is what shined the most this battle. While I wasn't too impressed by your scheme, it was a bit basic, all the other elements you were pretty on point with. You were able to take the image & make a full blown tale from it and I understand the difficulty of such, which I'm sure Camp bell also struggled with. Nonetheless you did a good job. Camp bell, one thing, you should try and write a little bit more with your pieces. A lot of writers will go about 24-32 lines average, and most of the time, it helps with rounding out their pieces more.
MVGT: Mike Wrecka.
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