Inno:
You need some work on the technical front, but you are improving. I can't say the same about your meandering story telling. We start with describing diamonds and how they're formed as a metaphor for.. wait, no, you're a diamond slaver, no, this is now a cinemax sex episode, no.. wait.. ugh. The language was really disappointing towards the end. I don't want to see "tits" in a topical piece ever again.
Mike:
technically sound and very gza. so gza. ahmagerd so gza. straightforward so no points for creativity there - both with the rhyme schemes and the story. it wasn't bad. it wasn't great. it was enough to beat inno, because seriously, his verse got so off putting. you played it safe and it worked out.
v/ mike
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