Certain - Stellar, but didn't stir up anything in my bones. Quality wording and thought construction. I'd have to say the main issue of this verse was convincing me of its authenticity. I try to be an open minded reader and allow characters to affect me; the first stanza was a bit dry emotionally. Good submission but left much to be desired in its final result.
Frank - Man, you almost lost me because I really dislike those instances where you blatantly force the rhyme (i.e. reeks of rose, seepingly gross) You pulled this one off with high marks though due to your ending. Vibrant storytelling. Aromatic and inventive. Good work, champ.
Vote - Frank
Props to both.
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