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Old 11-17-2013, 07:17 PM   #8
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Vator, I struggled to find the topical relation, at first I was thinking this was a seductive take on burning a witch (rub and hold/your tots against the flames) but then it sort of lost me. You set up a scenario over like 14 bars and then jist never really concluded anything. On top of that it was a semidifficult read with lots of unpolished bits and not enough poeticness or lyrical prowess to wow me

Mike... Yo, did you take adderall or something? Seriously dude, this is lyrically the best thing I've ever read from you, what ever you did, do more... The unorthodox campfire rhymes alone wowed my pubes off... Straight up, all the way to fucking papaya!? And it worked!? Your flow was like a zero viscosity fluid and your alliteration was superconductive. I honestly did not know you were capable of lyricism like this. Everything line I was going, damn man, I underestimated this guy. I enjoyed the abstract take on the direct interpretation of the topic, taking it back to its Neanderthal roots. Straight up, I have no negatives to give on this

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