First off, this is definitely receiving BOTW honors & a special feature in the mag, because of all the battles that happened this week, this one was just through the roof. I am very impressed with what both of you came up with in your verses, even though both pieces had a religious feel to them. I know the picture may have been challenging & I know a lot of people didn't write due to any inspiration from pictures, but this battle proves that the best writers in this league can put together dope drops whether it be regular topics or pictures. I commend you both for doing an exceptional job.
Genocide, I understand from your perspective that you probably wasn't feeling the picture at all, or maybe it was too challenging but let's be real- the verse you put together was very solid all around despite how you may have felt at it's completion. What impressed me the most about your piece, was the rhyme scheme. The way you transitioned from one line to the next was just sickening. The content wasn't lacking either. This had a humorous, knowledge like feel to it & the way you meshed that together was very impressive. The imagery was solid, you once again were able to take elements of the picture & describe them very well & with added flavor. Based on what others have said in the previous feedback, you should pat yourself on the back for putting together this verse and not letting the challenge of the picture be your downfall. Once again, you continue to prove yourself as one of the most consistent writers on this site. Well done.
Quote:
Its human nature, they're just playing hopscotch in the nude
Watching balloons, that feel like they've been watching us to
Binocular, zoom, look at the reproductive organs you pervs
The tits hung from those anatomies are perfectly curved
Superb, hanging from ropes so tightly they get turniquet burns
Observe them Fondle squid tentacles that yearn for the surf
Their not concerned in the worst, way to indignant to stop
While god is hovering, as if he bought some tickets to watch
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pohfig, your verse was just as good as Geno's. I don't know whether you struggled with the picture or not, but from what you put together, I don't believe you did. Whereas your opponent excelled in rhyme scheme, your piece excelled in it's content- your wording IMO was pretty wicked in the fact that you were able to take an idea & develop it from the beginning of your verse to the end. I would say you were more on point conceptually & as I read your verse, it just seemed to transition perfectly til the end. You took the elements of the picture & described them much differently than your opponent, maybe more creatively, because instead of taking what is happening in the image literally, you sort of fit the pieces within the content/concept of your piece. That was very intriguing. I also really enjoyed that repetitive ending, it fit perfectly & capped off a very well written story. Great stuff.
Quote:
Smile and accept this last graphic flash of nonsense
because, in turn, its your path to darkness.
Already half a carcass between sticks and a mattress
when that pastor starts wishing you passage.
All that's left is the chemical burn and sizzling flashes -
then figments to fragments until its crickets and blackness.
Isn't he Fascist?
Oppressing our scarce amount of living
and turning it into a reason to blow hot air about religion.
Our doomsday's rehearsed while he's ballooning the church -
Held down by Christenings for the newly re-birthed.
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This is a very difficult battle to judge because both of you took the same idea but molded your stories so differently from one another. Genocide's rhyme scheme was sick, each line transitioned smoothly & his imagery was solid. Pohfig's wording was impressive & actually made his piece read smoothly, even though the rhyme scheme was sort of basic and lacked complexity, and he tied in the elements of the picture in a very unique way than his opponent. Damn, this one is actually very hard to choose a winner. I've read both piece at least three times & I can go either way tbh.
I'm going to have to come back & edit in my vote a bit later.
VOTE EDIT: Very tough one here for me, but this goes to show how great this battle was. I'm going to go with the verse that was not only written well, but also was a bit more compelling to read. I really would vote a tie, this was very difficult for me, but I'm going to go with....
MVGT: Genocide.