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Old 11-15-2013, 02:09 AM   #7
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Originally Posted by BWHAHA View Post
I don't think so.
OK, I didn't.

I still think the flow is choppier than in most of your verses. The long words would need to be pronounced with unnatural syllable emphases in order to make the rhyming come together in a lot of places. I thought the more direct mocking of our friends worked better, but some of this was just way too out there. I like you a little more streamlined, which still isn't very streamlined. There was a Kool Keith element to this, much more than Aesop Rock, who doesn't have Kool Keith's sense of humor.
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