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Old 11-14-2013, 04:31 PM   #2
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I feel the second half murdered the first verse
but I did love thr build up of the first half
I really liked the coked up club tracks line that was sweet
the way you snuck in nincapoops was funny
I feel like you are sacrificing your fluid train of thought
for a more fluent flow which doesnt matter because the read was dope
the flow was on point. nice work V
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