Okay I'ma be blunt gen....... I couldn't rock with this picture or that verse son. I dunno. If I heard that live I would prolly have to duff you. Just to let the next rhymer speak because you desrcibe pictures so literally that I might as well just look at the picture because your verse isn't really providing the reader with anything new. For something just keyed up, that's cool man but I write this for my grandbabies.
Pent up..... Unmistakable. Verse was well done. Had a grandbaby verse that I was trying tell Genocide about. This wasn't superficial. When you ignore the picture, you do not lose track of the verse. Thats what I consider concept writing vs descriptive writing, even though they cross paths interwine double loop reverse inside out twirl spin knot.
some quotes.
Smile and accept this last graphic flash of nonsense
because, in turn, its your path to darkness.
Already half a carcass between sticks and a mattress
when that pastor starts wishing you passage.
All that's left is the chemical burn and sizzling flashes -
then figments to fragments until its crickets and blackness.
Isn't he Fascist?
Overall.
Adolf slept or was highly uninspired and can't really blame my dude cause their have been some questionable ass pictures this week. pun intended. pent up bodied that picture. vote - pohfig
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