Netcees - View Single Post - Sharp Nine vs. Jah Homie {Sharp Nine wins}

Swerve · 02-23-2013, 01:48 PM

Sharp - I actually enjoyed a good deal of your verse, but I'm assuming enough Jah lines been done. Jahvid Best was really nice regardless. Gamble line was also alright. I kinda like that you throw back the old school style of really short lines but to improve you may have to actually extend them a bit to fit some bigger concepts and have time to develop your ideas more.

Jah - No punches at all, lack of creativity. You were more or less just talking shit. You need to get at your tutor to get some pointers because while I'm sure you have the potential to be doing better, you're just not right now. Throw some wordplay, nameplay, similes...metaphores anything in there to get a rise out of the reader. I got Sharp here pretty easily because of it.

Vote - Sharp Nine

02-23-2013, 01:48 PM	#9
Swerve SDub Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,874 Battle Record: 40-34 Champed - Alias Tourney III (Heroes vs. Villians) - Fight Night LXIV - Netcees Battle League Rep Power: 64920327	Sharp - I actually enjoyed a good deal of your verse, but I'm assuming enough Jah lines been done. Jahvid Best was really nice regardless. Gamble line was also alright. I kinda like that you throw back the old school style of really short lines but to improve you may have to actually extend them a bit to fit some bigger concepts and have time to develop your ideas more. Jah - No punches at all, lack of creativity. You were more or less just talking shit. You need to get at your tutor to get some pointers because while I'm sure you have the potential to be doing better, you're just not right now. Throw some wordplay, nameplay, similes...metaphores anything in there to get a rise out of the reader. I got Sharp here pretty easily because of it. Vote - Sharp Nine __________________ No Cap Gang.