very sick battle. best ive read so far for sure.
geno- man that verse started off pretty insane. the flow and structure were top notch. the imagery was sick. you took the picture and basically described what was there but put it in a very creative way.
Extravagant sights, christ, its the sabbath in flight
Miraculous, right?, while people show their ass in day light
Their actions ain't quite what a father approves
Its human nature, they're just playing hopscotch in the nude
definitely the best four lines of the battle from either competitor. had me looking back at the picture like wow it does appear as if theyre playing hopscotch in the nude. it went on from there with more dopeness especially the dignity drops line but that middle section got off track just a bit.
Outdated kitchens, expired, let's get some plumbing restored
Let's get some pipe under this sink instead of one of these whores
I know her stomachs a board, but grab some lumber, ignore it
don't just stand there by the dozen, cluster fucking, perform
We have some pillars to pour, so pull your dick from the floor
Let gods children mature, before the storm hits the beach
I didn't vibe with this section as much as the rest. got a little preachy and self righteous. and made the verse change directions. immediately afterwards you went back were you were going, and righted the ship in a big way. finished strong with that orbs line.
very dope verse man
pohfig- sick verse and the take on the topic at first seemed only decent but as you wove it together it turned out excellent. that's what I liked most about this verse. you laid out a concept and then built it front of our eyes. it got stronger as the verse went on. it had incredible wording and very good vocabulary, but some of the end rhyme choices could have been better in a spot or two. don't take it the wrong way but when I read two verses that I enjoy so much I have to find the miniscule and minor flaws in each to decide which was better.
The start of our chemical death.
A breath for effect, colors collected and spread
lightest to darkest forming a blend of events
etched in our heads with leverage and depth
so deep Mariana's Trench turned to dreg.
The colors would bloom, then settle themselves
in sets of our friends, family and common places.
A cottage, lake and familiar forgotten faces.
u rhymed death with spread. which doesn't work for me. the rest is smooth up until that themselves is randomly thrown in there. like I said very minor complaints of a dope verse. that whole last stanza was very great and is what helped the verse immensely.
overall- this was so close its very hard to decide a winner. genocide was more descriptive and I actually enjoyed his take more. he had that middle section sag though. pohfig had a creative take of his own, which felt like a very complete telling. it didn't quite have the flow geno did though. both had exceptional wording. battle of the week imo. good work fellas
vote- genocide
I just enjoyed his slightly more. thanks for the enjoyable reads. I appreciate it.
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