[Objective]

Ye, I kinda agree with Breathless. Thought it was cool and had interesting rhymeschemes going. I'm not a fan of the paragraph-style tho', but that doesn't really matter when it comes down to it.

It's a swag n flow verse, you say a lot without really saying anything, yet you prove you know your shit so you accomplished what you came here to do. That's the beauty with pieces like this, but personally I prefer a concept of some sort. Every now and then I think it's cool to read stuff like this and I got to hand it to you; shit's very thorough and I enjoyed the read from start to finnish and that's something I respect. Think this shit would sound mad wicked on track tho'.

Boss linguist, often bored with you yawners.
I’m autistic, off the board as an author.
It’s called sickness, call support from the doctor.
Ya’ll bitches just politicians in office,
it’s all business, always sit on my caucus.
^ Dopeness, same thing goes for the grey presistence/rogaine emisions, straight emissions/propane conditions/OJ of Simpsons etc.

After reading this and thinking about my own shit I think you and me are at the exact opposite spectrum of writtens. I focus a lot more on content and the concept of the piece as a whole rather than syllables and multis etc., whereas you focus more on rhymeschemes and getting a clear message across while proving your ground, basicly the technical aspects of writing. We approach stuff differently and honestly; I think we got something to learn from eachother if we want to add more to our bag of tricks. Going to read more of your shit later on. Keep it up!