[Objective]

I can appreciate the craftmanship it takes to write this shit. The multies are on point, but as far as content and secong read-through goes it's rather bland and boring to me. It's basicly just you whining about some shit a lot of people go through without saying anything poignant or putting it in interesting light. I can relate A LOT to this shit as well, and for me to say that it was rather boring to read even when I can relate says a lot imo. The story itself is nothing special even tho' I can give props to the hardship you've been through and how you've handled it. Perhaps it is because I can relate that it came off as boring cuz you didn't say anything to me that made me open my eyes. I don't know, but something was definitely lacking content-wise imo.

I feel like this would work 100 times better as a audio rather than a written piece. It takes more than multies to make a great piece imo, as an audio it would be interesting to listen to the flow and you spitting some real life shit. Compared to what I've read from you before this wasn't appealing to me. Slightly above average; 5.5/10.

Edit: Word at what Dead Man said tho', this shit was dope:

Staring off in sunsets, Smirnoff is front and
Center when I venture into things I haven’t done yet

Think about my life, and I’m bored with this career choice
Single now I’m like a little horny when I hear a voice
Of a femaaale, then I sudden-ly feel
That it’s time to move on.. so I’m done with retail

But that's about it for me.