[Malachi]

Originally Posted by zygote

Coup started well but lost direction, and Malachi's ending was a let down. The "it was all a dream" kind of ending was disappointing but maybe it works because of the humor. Although, the punchline at the end did feel like it came from nowhere. Perhaps, your writing could have been strengthened if you had more clarity. E.g., the line "The female woman face had no detail women." is hard to understand.

Coup it was great how you kept the religious metaphors throughout, my only criticism is some lines seemed like they were thrown in E.g., "A microphone explodes, no trump silences what is sown..." did not see how it fit in with the rest of the writing. Voted for Coup.

that was a typo, sorry.