Actually thought C.M.D.'s writing was superior. The verse was almost like a challenge, don't see how the interpretation of the image is incorrect "RAWN's child hood imagination land". Perhaps, it gave Rawn an opportunity to respond with "VERITAS fantasy land" but didn't go in that direction which is disappointing. I don't know if this is the place to discuss it but the above comments seem to be focusing on rhyme schemes as a heavily weighted criteria. Yes, C.M.D. had basic rhyme schemes but rhymes like "dies exposed - lies exposed" makes me think the rest was intentional (maybe simplistic rhymes to reflect a child's simplistic thoughts - e.g., "daddy wasn't around to be found.") If we are judging solely on quality of rhymes and not topic, then perhaps we should just drop the pretense of calling it a topical league and call it AOB Rhyming Contest League instead. C.M.D. took a brave approach to the topic which was well written, focused and got its point across clearly. Rawn was good too but largely surface level and descriptive, which in comparison to C.M.D.'s, Rawn's topic discussion felt basic. Preemptive apology if anyone thinks the comments are directed at them, they are not, it's just reflective thoughts not intended as aggressive towards anybody. Voted C.M.D for the superior topic in relation to the picture.
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