Didn't like either of these.
Mr. J was performing an exhibition match on generic topical vocabulary then threw it a "twist" that failed miserably at the end to force the picture into his already written verse.
Frank's was a better story but good lord was the rhyme scheme basic. I felt like I was reading a high school poem more than anything. The imagery was good in spots, though overly reliant on it for the sake of rhyming things / filling space.
In the end, this is a topical league. Mr. J stuck to the topic in name only. Frank at least made the effort.
v/ Frank
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