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pancake- you really focused on the image itself here. i can appreciate that. there were a few places i was just left guessing, and intended to come back.. so here i am.
fumbled with wit? what? does quids rhyme with reprieves? i thought it was pronounced like squid. anyway, "Simple. Getting high enough to ignore the past that he lived," heeey i did that. i can relate with that. yellow sweater may be interpreted a couple of different ways. but i found meaning in that most might not have. i like how you word things. i can't really say this line was fantabulous, or another line was splendiforous, but altogether.. it's just a kind of unorthodox eloquence i truly do appreciate.

Lest one seat, Marlon the next. One confident, the other was less.

i just like how you roll is all. that's all i can really say, cake. i like how you roll here. and your approach at your picture could have given you the /v without pulling it off as well as you did against anyone but vulgar. set yourself up for success. great piece.

vulgar- i don't know what you were getting at, without reading the votes. and after reading the votes, i still can't make any sense out of most of it. it's not that it was written badly, because it looks great. sounds good. rhymed well.. bounced around a lot though. i would have to understand all of the references and phrases and words.. (i did look up every word i didn't know - to no avail) i just can't make any sense of it. some of my favorite lines..

with Pluto gone, we've gone mad, lost all desire to live
all licenses to kill the dark side using white light beams
mounted on a ship heralded Apartheid, parts tied up
Delicatessen hairnets discarded as a barren anthem bleeds
Lycanthropy, life's canceled season debuting Lambo-dreams

i enjoyed how you worded this and it's general tone. as far as the entire piece goes, i will be coming back to it on a better day and trying to give a to through again.. pull it apart, make sense of it all for myself. very nice drop. just way over my ahead.


/v pancake i understood his verses relation to the picture more. if i had been taking my vitamins or not drinking as much as i do, i would likely have voted the other way. so sorry to ding you on my aptitude vulgar, but i guess in the end.. the audience isn't always on your level.