mvgt certain this week, because his end piece felt more complete at the end. his mechanics on top of the well told story made my decision.
i did like what you did with yours, adonis. i just didn't get a feeling something just happened. instead, it was as if you made an observation, rather then giving me a story i can make observations about. had you wrote a little more, or developed one of your characters fully - this could have gone either way.
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