Man, innovator, this was so terribly unpolished, even with an edit!? Wtf, you coulda smashed this, but it was a chore to read at times, but after figuring out the spelling errors and missing apostrophes, run on lines that you still capitalized at the beginning, etc, I did get a feel for it, but still, the pancake shit was so random and out of place it was off putting as hell... I am disappointed because I think I saw what this could have been, but it was just apparently slapped together
YDK - nice intimately personal piece here, now that I've been more active in chat, I understood everything, and it was awesome, cohesive flow, just enough elegant multis (cubicle zoo was a nice touch) all around solid, direct, and not really anything to interpret, the relation to the picture of unwinding on the boardwalk after work, work you worked for to provide the family that's being slightly alienated by the work... Real nice, especially being that short, you packed a lot in
Vote - YDK
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