[Adonis]

Zen - some decent lines and thoughts but I still feel. Like you get caught up in rhyming. "Flushe up with a gush gazin" gush gazing?? Idk bro, you did this a couple times, seems like rhyme becauuse the rhyming possibility is there. Story was cool, a bit hard. To follow but moved on quickly. I liked the verse, but not semi close to your. Ability IMO.

Mike good read, some small errors were "while"/ will and "just hit the. Gas", just wasn't necessary imo.story had pace, not complex with rhyme at all, but it read well..I will say this, if you put it into actual sentence read this... "heading from the caos, unles thhe signs are wrong cause then we are seriously pressed for time". When I read that a sentence and not broken up bar I. Don't like it, it didn't work.


Vote Mike, his verse was just better, smoother, easier to read.