Okay. First read of this paragraph form, don't like it. Although. I think if mastered completely, it would be great. I liked the verse tho, it seems you do have skill & I can sense it. With this one I couldn't get into it like I wanted to. Mike had a decent verse, I like your style actually. Only nitpick the ending didn't feel complete. It needed more in the middle. I'm sorry to cut this short, but I'm way too exhausted to detail. I give this to Mike
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