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Old 11-09-2013, 02:26 PM   #6
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ZYG - Bahahahaha, you are unique in this world of busting rhymez. Solid take on the topic, comparing the life cycle and geography of three different planets and tying them together. Decent writer's voice, a bit monotone. A bit text-bookie. Not contrived though, like some Discovery Channel universe documentaries can tend to be. You with the voice of Neil DeGrasse Tyson would make this one more memorable. Just reading it isn't really complementary of a charismatic, vibrant telling.

Genocide - lmao. You could've done so many things with this pic, fam. This verse was well composed but ultimately it felt stale to me from the beginning because I knew where it was going. Nothing innovative or unexpected was offered on the table. Writing-wise, Zyg was even with you, so you didn't have him in that aspect.

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