[Geno]

Excellent champ match.
Was everything that one should be

Mrj
I read your verse a couple times before frank showed up. I was really digging it. Your mechanics, as I said recently in an OM of yours.. are very fun to to read lately.
My gripes are.. I don't like how you personalized this. When I look at that picture I see everything but a personalized verse. You did well though. And it had some pretty nice concepts and lines that I was feeling. Also.. I hate to nitpick about this, because everyone knows that for one, I'm a personalized writer who speaks from anintrospective point of view a lot.. but also -I. Rarely flex my ability to use rare vocabulary anymore.. and that's a problem I had here. I noticed that in a lot of areas, imo anyway.. you got into a really deep thought and dropped a really weak word or two into play that just fel it was drop of the ball concerning execution. I mean, some of the concepts you brought to the table were outstanding and then it was like I had no choice to forget what you were trying to say because the use of a certain word just grabbed my total attention and made me cringe.

Ie
don't act if you are unfit, essentially undeserving
nervous, I figured experience was for the earnest...
Earnest made me cringe so hard that everything leading up to that word was lost for me. And that entire opening sextion was teetering from really dope back to just dope all the way up to that point. Does that make sense? I hope it does, because I need you to understand that I'm only being critical because your the man rite now and I'm trying to leave you thoughts that the man should be left with so that he can improve a touch.

Anyway.. this happened throughout the verse and I was just like man.. why the fuck did he do that, was it for lack of a better word? Which I doubt. Then I started to realize something. And I was like, man.. I have this hunch that mrj keystyled this in a briefly editorial mode. In other words you wrote whatever came to mind, and when you came to an area like "earnest" you just grabbed the first unrepeated rhyming word you could and completely sacrificed everything you know is rite in hopes that the reader would never mind what just happened. Am I on point with this thought?
Maybe. Maybe not. But asside from all of that, I think your shit is dope and I'm a fan dude

Frank
I don't even know to begin being upset with you. I mean, really I'm not. You paint such a picture perfect view of this scenario. From the human perspective all the way down to the wildlife and cause of a dying landscape. It was excellent. Ii guess my only true grip was the unneccessary extension of some lines that you layed, which is sort of a typical frank display.. but sometimes, throught this verse, or maybe only narrowed down to a few spots... you just really packed a lot into one line that could have been broken up and found the same touch or impact that it did being a super line.
Asside from that, I think your touch for internals and scheming are truelly top notch. I definitely understand what you mean by :your too tame: in referrence to a geno verse. I think your quite the opposite tbh and would love to see some personification at some point from you. Your a painter with words.. but the canvas never seems to express how franks feeling inside, only the characters.. it leaves a little bit to be wanted from point of view. Doesn't at all take away from how well you write though

This battle was excellent.
Myvgt: frank this week. I feel like he was able to capture a world that most people couldn't see solely by looking at the picture, but once read -you could look back and say wow. That could really be what's going on rite now in that picture and we don't really know

Mrj wrote a dope verse, but I feel he fell from the true topic of the picture and he had a lot of negatives going on in his verse for me that simply took away from the entire impact of what he was going for.
Still a good display though, respect to both

V/frank