dope battle guys!
innovator - very nice verse. especially the first quarter of it
The breeze from the east, the clouds west of the sun
The tide crashing at peace. Time with no pendulum
A santum for us, wed swim until our arms went numb.
Your Skin glistened.
And we fornicated as sin wished it.
Two misfits persistent in each other reflection
Perceived love perfect under the waves positon
A current so insistent and a rip tide convincing
very ambient. really enjoyed this section. it went down hill in the middle but picked back up at the end.
the ending was kinda abrupt and didn't make me feel anything. which was disappointing. but overall it was a good verse
YDK - you wrote a real short verse. that may hurt you. what you did write was enjoyable. how you would rather just be sitting there on the shore with your girl looking out at the water. that's probably how you two started out. with nothing, no money no where to go but the shore and that view was free so you hung out there. now you have possesions but you long for those early days when things were simple and free and relaxing. I know that feeling. I live it. so this verse really hit home for me. the rhyming was good. the mechanics were good. needed some more inners maybe. thanks for the read.
overall - inno had the better mechanical verse, ydk had a more cohesive story. I think YDK wrote too short of a verse to get my vote. you had it man but just didn't have enough of it. good reads thanks guys
vote - Inno
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