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Old 11-07-2013, 08:14 PM   #31
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I really felt the transitioning of your verse is what makes this great
the way you make this flow together so cohesively is perfect in my eyes
truly an inspiration, I do felt like you could have left out Copy's name
name drops don't usually work in most aspects of things, unless it's dissing
this was more abstract/introspective/poetic....idk what else, it was smooth though

now i'm drinking everyday before i head into work
cancer in my family, we're genetically cursed
so this toxicity is only doing destiny's work
let it be known, let it be holy, let it be heard
a legend was born. now every other legend disturbed
a legacy in theory is a legacy earned
there's nothing to teach and even less to be learned
symmetrical, serum ventricle, dimensional curves
^^^^
from this point on I felt like it was perfection
you always surprise me with how you structure your lines
I don't know what your pattern is...but it works..
you did a great job my dude, congrats on the HOF
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