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Old 11-06-2013, 06:19 PM   #3
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Love this battle

Symetrik, you tied seasons into your verse nicely.
Only thing I couldn't quite grasp though, and hopefully I'm in the ballpark here at least. Was weather or not your character was a heart broken parent. Or a disgruntled student.. or perhaps both? Or maybe I'm totally off. Read the verse a couple times and it was tough to follow exactly what was going on.
Mechanically I feel like it started a tad slow and then built along with the content.. which to me is a dope touch, so no complaints there.

Dam
I sense the typical life/death sort of content I've seen a lot. What makes your verse dope though, is the technicals you pulled off. Had a very nice rhythm and then switched and then back and then forth and stayed. Thoroughly liquid imo. Thought it read superbly, not much unlike symetriks verse.
I dug the story, seen it done in different ways here and there a few times before but I'm gonna get over that in this particular situation. You have a slight advantage as far as I'm concerned this week, and that is because you wrote a touch longer verse that had enough details for me to fully understand what was going on. Not to say that its going to seal a. Victory for you, not by any meaans is that what I'm trying to say.. because perhaps my comprehension will differ from everyone elses..

But anyhow, having said all that, this was a very tough call for me. I knew what symetri was capable of and even predicted in his favor this week.. wasn't sure about dam because its just been too long since I've seen him active anywhere. He surprised, aso I was a little surpised that symetrik didn't bring a more thorough verse. But again.. maybe my comprehension skills are lacking tonight?

I gotta go ahead and vote for dam this week, with what to me, would be considered an upset win

V-dam
Could still go either way. Good battle

GL to both here
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